I never done a scientifically accurate conversation before. Even though it was fun to write it’s not my best work so I’ll try again. This time using a summary of the science to make a basic subject for conversation and let it flow more naturally 

Welcome to a Critical Fiction

Crit-Fic is basically fan fiction with the exception that it’s based on a work that disappointed me. For a while I was a fan of Sam Fennah’s work. I watched and shared his animations, enjoyed his web series Satellite City and waited patiently to finally get his first book Amygdala… just to hate it

“Reviews”

“While I usually appreciate a good moral dilemma, (in this case, an argument between pushing for a merciful society, or remaining in pure Darwinistic logic), the arguments presented in the book left me vehemently disagreeing with both sides. I believe this must have been intentional, but it became problematic when the primary characters, including Lucy, aligned strongly with these extremes.”

“my frustration peaked during a major public debate in the last third of the book, when both sides of the argument were spearheaded by major political leaders. In particular, I felt the arguments presented in favor of a more merciful society felt surprisingly childish, considering that the one making it was supposedly an intelligent and capable leader; it felt like she was intentionally lobotomized, just so she would lose.”

“I did not enjoy this.The plot is poorly thought out, the characters are quite bland, there are way too many characters to keep up with, it takes too long to get going, the worldbuilding, while interesting, is a bit too off-putting for my taste, and the themes are just terrible and poorly constructed.”

  “Fennah is careful to admit at the fore of the book his desire to explore conflicting ideologies, but too much weight is placed on one side of this argument for this to ring particularly true. At the same time as characters lovingly espouse the merits of quite literally eating children versus a rudimentary form of healthcare”

“Abysmal. Objectively bad writing. Lucy Lacemaker has so much plot armor, she might as well be piloting a mech.”

“I really hope Fennah learns from this and grows as an author. There is potential in this. He just needs to scrutinize his stories a bit harder next time to iron out all these problems.”

Below is a video critique although it’s not me I agree with her on this 

Despite all of this I still love these characters and so I’m creating a world where I can experience them in a different light than what Fennah has for them. I will not be reading any more of his books and I hold nothing against him as a person nor do I make any money off of this project. I just have a different vision for the characters and a desire to share my world 

Organelle

A world based on cell biology each part of the cell is part of the world I call Organelle. The setting, plot, character’s personality traits are all from biology including conversation 

For my world the story begins with a mysterious UFO crash, a pod carrying Lucy, Harlow and Dalton lands in the forest of Plas.

Chapter one follows the story of the crash and the retrieval of three comatose bodies.

They will be subjected to an intense screening process and then it’s to be decided by the elites of Organelle and their allies on what to do with them