Separated my blog into chapters as you can see there’s a lot of them. I finished mapping out all the biology on the basics of a cell which I am using to create an alien civilization. If you are new here. My blog is going to be a collection of short stories made scientifically accurate as I can. The characters featured are from a web series called Satellite City. I stated earlier that I’m looking to add psychology as well and I still will but, it’s on the back burner for now until I develop my skills in writing. I would love your feedback and feel free to ask any questions. Hope you enjoy!

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Welcome

Crit-Fic is basically fan fiction with the exception that it’s based on a work that disappointed me. I go into more detail about this where you can see that I bought the book, enjoyed the web series and loved the animations. 

Below is a diagram of an animal cell in which my world called Organelle is based on and below that is a T Cell 

I will keep you updated on my progress on the page I call The Process where you can see me put together my articles. 

I will introduce you to a few characters 

This is some of my fiction 

Wexle and her people have been an ally to Organelle (this world) for tens of thousands of years unfortunately the change in regime could end this.

The story begins as Methusa and Wexle are walking down a long hallway together, their business being to exchange monthly reports. Methusa hands over the documents to Wexle. “Hmmm something doesn’t feel right this time, Methusa looks nervous” Wexle thinks to herself. She decides not to risk it and asks if she can look over the document once more. Methusa does her best to contain her fear and says “Yes. Yes of course”. Wexle takes out a pair of AI powered glasses, as they scan through the information Wexle stops walking. “This report is not mathematically correct something is missing?”

Methusa is panicking inside “The information is appropriate” Wexle looks at her and says “What do you mean by appropriate exactly?” Methusa’s face goes dead as she has to deliver this news “There has been an information border placed ordered by the regime”. Wexle glares at her, furious. “We have been allies for thousands of years and our reports given to you have always been explicit and unedited. We expect the same in return. If you want to keep us as allies we expect competence. We will give you a month to clean up your act and expect an unaltered report. Is that clear?!” Methusa fighting to hold back tears pleads for Wexle to understand she is just following orders. As they part ways Wexle says to her “There will be consequences if you don’t, you could lose a powerful ally and gain an adversary. DNA is our business Methusa how do you expect us to unlock the mystery of our creator by censoring crucial information? Answer me that!” Methusa begins to sob. Wexle is throughly disappointed and leaves Methusa behind. “You are breaking intergalactic and inter dimensional law Methusa DNA editing is highly illegal! If this is to be repeated.. enjoy your Idolism as you permanently slip into the dark ages!” Wexle storms off.

For the next meeting Wexle has a plan.

 One month later Methusa is to meet with Wexle again. She clutches the enveloped document as a teardrop falls onto it. Walking down a familiar hallway. At the end she sees Wexle, standing, holding a large black bag in her right hand. Ludwig (a very powerful man) is also standing there, arms folded looking clearly angry. Wexle approaches Methusa “The new report. Has the information been made “appropriate” once again?” Methusa avoids eye contact and nods. “I. see. Come with us” says Wexle as they walk into a very plain room with a long white table Wexle places the bag on top of it and sits. Ludwig signals to Methusa to sit across from Wexle. “Methusa please sit we need to have a discussion”

Wexle opens the bag and pulls out… Bob, who lets out a giggle and snorts “Hi Mom!” Wexle gripping Bob in her hand as his eyes bulge with every squeeze. “What? Would you call? This? Wexle holds Bob in front of Methusa’s face as binary code washes over and flickers him for a second. “This is the subject of what you call “appropriate” DNA and RNA. This!” Says Ludwig as he slams his fist on the table. Wexle adds “Lucky for Bob he’s a simulation, we would never actually create such a creature and offer it to our allies as knowledge. You have sinned against nature and insulted everything we stand for. We run a legitimate business. We study nature not tamper with it! We simulated him to show you what you gave us.” Ludwig adds “Very Draconian of you Methusa. (Calling someone Draconian implies their lack of morals is at the point of being unbelievable) you are cut off! We are no longer allies and Organelle is to be quarantined. See how long your world lasts with zero resource income. Your world will be subjected to monitoring and eventual surprise intervention. You might be a charity case for a few worlds if you’re lucky. Watch your world wither away and die from its own toxicity. You have made your fate. I have nothing more to say and frankly I’m tired of your face.” Wexle puts Bob back into the bag as Ludwig throws the document at Methusa as they turn and show themselves out. Imagine if you will the scene of Methusa zooming out as she buries her face in her hands.

Currently I’m in the process of creating an alien civilization that has been mapped out by the anatomy of an animal cell. I do my best to break down the biology, which can get complicated, and explain every part then use associative thinking the cognitive process that involves linking seemingly unrelated ideas to create something new. That is creating the world I call Organelle 

On the page titled A World Alive I show you a fair and balanced society and in contrast to that are the pages The Deadly Order One and Two where a regime change brings corruption and death to Organelle. This regime is led by a woman named Locket, the corruption and decline following the process of death for a cell.

The people won’t stand for this to be their end and they retaliate. On the page Destroy the Corrupt is the most important war to happen in Organelle this of course being mapped out by a type of cell in our immune system called T Cells they are cells that fight off cell mutations.

But, who is Locket?

With speeches like this one she deceived enough people to get elected

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I hope you enjoy reading this blog and if you wish to contact me I welcome your feedback 

Below is an awesome video to share with you 

By the way I must make this clear:

I don’t make ANY money from this it’s purely a passion project 

“While I usually appreciate a good moral dilemma, (in this case, an argument between pushing for a merciful society, or remaining in pure Darwinistic logic), the arguments presented in the book left me vehemently disagreeing with both sides. I believe this must have been intentional, but it became problematic when the primary characters, including Lucy, aligned strongly with these extremes.”

“my frustration peaked during a major public debate in the last third of the book, when both sides of the argument were spearheaded by major political leaders. In particular, I felt the arguments presented in favor of a more merciful society felt surprisingly childish, considering that the one making it was supposedly an intelligent and capable leader; it felt like she was intentionally lobotomized, just so she would lose.”

“I did not enjoy this.The plot is poorly thought out, the characters are quite bland, there are way too many characters to keep up with, it takes too long to get going, the worldbuilding, while interesting, is a bit too off-putting for my taste, and the themes are just terrible and poorly constructed.”

  “Fennah is careful to admit at the fore of the book his desire to explore conflicting ideologies, but too much weight is placed on one side of this argument for this to ring particularly true. At the same time as characters lovingly espouse the merits of quite literally eating children versus a rudimentary form of healthcare”

“I really hope Fennah learns from this and grows as an author. There is potential in this. He just needs to scrutinize his stories a bit harder next time to iron out all these problems.”

I don’t dislike Fennah on a personal level but I hope he’s able to advance as a writer. I wish him the best with his new audience.

To be fair my work has been criticized too calling my concept pointless and “Stoner Talk” all the more motivation to show that no it is not pointless and if people only understand it when they’re high well good for them, hope they learn something

Organelle was at one point strong, proud, sophisticated and a thriving world. A world with many extraterrestrial allies with whom they would regularly trade DNA that has been translated and transcribed into knowledge. This knowledge is used to advance their societies and unlock the mysteries of the universe and it’s creator. 

Unfortunately that is all in jeopardy as Locket is elected and makes Organelle into a monarchy like a queen bee would have complete control over the hive.

 The people are not going to put up with this for long and must start the most important war that Organelle has ever faced to put an end to Locket…